In my first poem, I put eraser in the combination of hiragana and katagana for the reason it is composed so, in addition I want emphasize this word as it is more right angular in its shape for eye catching.
The second use of report in katagana as it is a loanword, the reason I choose it is because here in the u.s., the homework is often in the form of report. I want stress the American culture in my poem to present my graduate life in foreign countries.
The third usage of Christmas is also a loanword to stress the important timing. Present in katagana is used to emphasize the western culture exchange small tokens in this cold season with warm heart.
Great job! I really like your combination of Hiragana and Katakana. Particularly after reading your explanations as to why you chose to write certain words in each script, you really give the reader a lot to think about in each poem.
In my first poem, I put eraser in the combination of hiragana and katagana for the reason it is composed so, in addition I want emphasize this word as it is more right angular in its shape for eye catching.
ReplyDeleteThe second use of report in katagana as it is a loanword, the reason I choose it is because here in the u.s., the homework is often in the form of report. I want stress the American culture in my poem to present my graduate life in foreign countries.
The third usage of Christmas is also a loanword to stress the important timing. Present in katagana is used to emphasize the western culture exchange small tokens in this cold season with warm heart.
I think your first senryuu is really cute and thought-provoking. love it.
ReplyDeleteThe second one is personal and got me chuckling. love it.
Comparing to the first two, the third one is a bit confusing. What present? Whose present?
Great job! I really like your combination of Hiragana and Katakana. Particularly after reading your explanations as to why you chose to write certain words in each script, you really give the reader a lot to think about in each poem.
ReplyDeleteNice senryu! Personally I think it can be better that if you change the last line of the first senryu to を消(け)しする... ^ ^
ReplyDeleteI agree with Eagle.
ReplyDeleteI got such powerful reaction from your first two,
but not so much with the third.
I think you write such nice せんりょう!
(Jealous! :))
I can relate to your senryu. おもしろい です！
ReplyDeleteTHis seriu is really good wow! and it's so cute while giving food for thought!
ReplyDeleteWell done!
とてもおもしろいですね。